慎小嶷写作训练班专用教材

慎小嶷， 环球雅思名师，被学生亲切地成为“雅思五虎将”之一 ，“写作四大天王”之一。主讲雅思写作，独创“慎氏写作法”，透析雅思写作考试的应试体系，抹去学生写作考试中“永远的痛”。慎小嶷旅美多年、深谙欧美文化，其学生经过他的培训大多取得满意的成绩。现整理慎小嶷老师写作训练班专用教材的内容，方便广大烤鸭同胞更好地复习备考。

难点一： Academic Writing 学术类写作问题的特殊要求（改错练习）
1. Since private companies don’t care much about the public interests, so the government has a significant role to play in scientific research. (不能缩写)
2. Why these travellers damage the environment should be analyzed. （英式美式拼法不
能混用）
3. We must do our best（utmost） to protect (preserve) animals. (词汇用法太嫩)
4. It is clear (manifest) that pornographic shows do harm to (undermine, endanger,
jeopard) the lives of lots of youngster (adolescent).词汇，专有特定的修饰
5. Nowadays (In present-day society), human beings face big challenges in many areas.
6. In these day and age, many companies have replaced telephone with internet.
7. We are confronted with many environmental problems. They are becoming more and more serious. (句式，语法)
8. The traffic problem is becoming worse. We must work together to solve it.(句子结构)
9. So individuals, communities and the government all must work hard to fight crime! (不 应该带感情色彩)
10. We must be friendly to other because the Bible said, “Treat your neighbors as you would like to be treated.” (文化背景，圣经不可用)

难点二： No specific topic pool. 题库大，没有公开，而且题目变化多。
对策：雅思话题不会超出十大类别：
文明类：
Tourism
Education
Government
Women and families
Language and culture
Technology and the Media
Development and globalization
野蛮类：
Crime
Animals
Environmental problem

难点三：中国大陆考生对很多话题不熟悉，考场上思考素材花费时间太长
对策：掌握思考素材的四种方法
a 分类法
Some high-school graduates go to travel or work for a period of time before they go to study in universities. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this practice to their studies.
Some people think old building should be destroyed and replaced to make room for newconstructions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
B 替代法
Some people think motorized flight was the greatest invention in the twentieth century. Do you agree or disagree?
Some people think stricter punishment for driving offenders is the only effective way to improve safety on the road. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people think animal experimentation should be banned because they are cruel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
C 综合法
Some people think students should be allowed to evaluate the teachers’ job performance. Others think this will lead to loss of discipline and respect. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Some people think the government should pay for education and health care. Others think this is not the responsibility of the government. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
D 裸奔法 （无想法时的救命稻草）
People today can perform the everyday tasks such as shopping, banking or even business transactions, without meeting others face-to-face. What effects will this phenomenon have on individuals and society as a whole? Unlike many other countries, police officers in the UK do not carry guns. Some people think this is a wise policy. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
往以下这些方面考虑论点 取第一个字母缩写:
TM STREEC $
Technology & Efficiency Environment & Health
Mind & Soul Employment & Competition
Society & Crime Culture & Population
Time & Space Money & Fun
Rights & Responsibilities
TM STREEC $
Tech & Ef Envi & Heal
Mind & soul Empl & Comp
Soci & Crim Cul &Plp
Times & Spa Mo & Fun
Ri & Resp

难点四： 中国考生掌握语法的深度和广度让人惊叹，但是使用时准确度不够
对策： 雅思写作“语法的七宗罪”改错练习
1． Employee can benefit more from telecommuting than employee. （n.可数不可数）
2.1 Work at home using modern technology can greatly enhance our efficiency. (v.原型不 可做主语)2.2 Children who are raise in impoverished families can generally deal with problems more effectively in their adult years. (被动语态)
2.3 The problems that are created by environmental contamination is very hard to resolve.
(主谓一致)
2.4 In present-day society, cultures were becoming very similar. (时态)
3. Intelligent students should not be treated different by their teachers. 副词
4.1 Countries should pay attention on the disadvantages globalization may create. 介词
4.2 The Internet has instead of teachers in many classrooms.
5. Some parents do not obey traffic rules himself.
6. These old buildings should be destroyed, new buildings must be constructed. 逗号
7. These are a great many children think the main purpose of education should be to afford them pleasure and enjoyment.

说明
A 内容分为三部分:开头段通用模板，主体段为加分句型，结尾段为模板；B 为了方便同学 使用，又分为进步类，倒退类，中间类和解决类模板；C 这里职包括作者Patrick 在IELTS写作大作文里实际写作种经过检验确实实用的模板，不常用的或者小作文的模板没有包括。

开头段通用模板
进步类
1） In contemporary society, the human race is advancing at an unprecedented rate in a multitude of arenas. 在当今社会，人类正以前所未有的速度在很多领域向前发展。
2） Today we have embarked upon the …era. 今天，我们已经进入了…的时代。We have embarked upon the information era.
3） Since the advent/arrival of the…era… 随着…时代的到来…例句：Since the advent of the information era, our efficiency at work has been greatly enhanced.随着信息时代的 到来，我们的工作效率得到了很大的提高。例句2 With the advent of the information era, school education has undergone profound changes at an accelerated rate.

倒退类
4） But A is attended/accompanied by B 但是伴随着…（某种好现象）的到来，某种坏现 象也出现了。例句：But the proliferation of English is accompanied by the extinction of many lesser-known languages.但是随着英语的广泛传播的是大量小语种的消亡。
5） Accompanying all the boons brought about by the profound social changes have com some sufferings; and …is very prominent among them. 随着深刻的社会变革带来的种 种好处，出现了很多问题，…是其中很显著的一个。
6） With the incidence(发生率) of …hovering at high levels, many have become disturbedand alarmed. …的发生率居高不下，这引起了很多人的困扰和警觉。例句：With the incidence of driving offenses hovering at high levels, many have become disturbed
and alarmed.

7） In this day and age, it is standard practice for … to do something. 今天，某些人做某事是很普遍的。例句：In this day and age, it is standard practice for parents to rush around all day busying themselves with their work.
8） Such a grave situation merits our careful attention.这样一个严重的情况值得我们关注。
9） The issue of … has been thrown into sharp relief/focus. …引起了人们的强烈关注。例句：Soaring car ownership has thrown the issue of car accidents into sharp relief.
10） However, there is no consensus on …yet. 或者 people hold divergent /contrasting/conflicting view on… 或者 people are divided over… 不同的人关于某个 问题持不同的看法。例句：People hold contrasting views on animal experiments.人们 对动物试验持不同的看法。
11） Something has been growing at an alarming/ staggering rate. 某事物正在以令人震惊的速度增长。例句：With the car ownership soaring in China, traffic accidents have been growing at an alarming/staggering rate.
12） Whether…has triggered/sparked/aroused/given rise to spirited debate.是否应该…引起了激烈的辩论，同样的意思还可以用以下三个常用句型表达 …Whether…is a highly debatable issue. 或者Whether… is an issue open to debate 或者 Whether…is a controversial issue. 例句： Whether student should appraise their teachers’ performance is an issue open to debate.是否学生应该评价老师的教学是一个没有定论 的问题。
13） Some (people) assert/contend/argue/hold/maintain/claim/think/believe that… 有一些人认为…例句：Some people assert that relocating large companies to the countryside is the best way to resolve the traffic and housing problems in cities。一些人认为把大公司搬到乡村是解决城市交通和住房的最好方法。
14） …is largely fuelled by...某现象主要是被…所推动。例句：The proliferation of plastic bag is largely fuelled by the pursuit for lower costs.

前进类
1 profit from
People the world over can profit from the advancement in motorized flight.
2 A is an integral /indispensable part of B
Advertising has become an indispensable part of our lives and it has been exerting profound influence on the way we live, work, play and learn.
3 something plays a pivotal /key role in …
It is universally acknowledged that education plays a pivotal role in individual success.
4 enable /allow somebody to do something
Cultural assimilation enables newly-arrived immigrants to get ahead in the new society successfully.
5 get accustomed to do something/adjust to /adapt to
New immigrants must get accustomed to the local culture to succeed.
6 Someone can get access to something 或者 can access something 或者can utilize something
In this day and age, many individuals can access the Internet via computer or mobile phone.

倒退类
1 …is attended by /…is accompanied by
The staggering advancement of technology is attended by server pollution of the
ecosystem.
2 The more…the more…
The more vehicles on the road, the more traffic congestions to occur.
3 A can be attributed to B 或者B stems from A
The proliferation of traffic accidents can be in large measure attributed to the traffic law not being stringent enough.
4 be afflicted with/be plagued with
In present-day society, a host of countries are afflicted with chronic poverty.
5 deprive someone of something
Modern cities deprive city-dweller of fresh air and the comfortable pace of life.
6 something prompt/impels somebody to do…
Peer pressure often impels youngster to spend excessively on fancy clothes and accessories.
7 A has rendered B + adj./noun 形容词或名词
We must ensure that technological innovations will not render us slaves to high technology. 其中 We must ensure that..意思是我们必须确保… 我们必须确保科技创新不会让我们变成高科技的奴隶。
The fast-paced way of life has rendered many people alienated from one another. 快节奏的生活让很多人彼此疏远。
8 A recent study conducted by the （Chinese academy of Social Science） reveal that…
如果是教育问题用UNESCO 如果是犯罪问题可以用the Ministry of Justice 交通问题可以用the Ministry of Transportation 建筑问题可以用the Ministry of Construction 环境问题可 以HSUS and Greenpeace
A recent study conducted by HSUS and Greenpeace suggested that there were over one million mammals in lab cages today.
9 be addicted to /preoccupied with something
In present-day society, many individuals are addicted to /preoccupied with various forms of gambling.
10 something is the chief culprit in 或者something is the root cause of …
The population explosion is the chief culprit in/ the root cause of water scarity.
11 be confronted with something
In contemporary society, we are confronted with a plethora of violent and pornographic TV shows.
12 present/pose a threat to…
In contemporary society, the proliferation of non-biodegradable rubbish poses a grave threat to humanity.
13 be awash with/be inundated with something
The media are be awash with/be inundated with detailed crime coverage.
14 if…something will ensue
If parents neglect their offspring, lack of discipline and respect will ensue.
15 With the incidence of … hovering at high levels, many have become disturbed and alarmed.

With the incidence of driving offenses hovering at high levels, many have become
disturbed and alarmed.
16 something is unwarranted /unjustifiable
Experimenting upon lab animals without trying to alleviate their pain is unwarranted/ unjustifiable.

中间类
1…on the grounds that…
Some others oppose to animal experimentation on the grounds that it is inhumane.
2 exert beneficial/ baneful/ profound influence on something
In this day and age, globalization is exerting profound impact on the way we work, live, play and learn.
3 A prevail over / outweigh/ outbalance B
The advantages of imposing stiffer punishment on driving offender prevail over the disadvantages.
4 A bring about/ generate/ breed/ engender/ spawn /induce B.
Technological innovations have brought about profound changes to the political, economical and cultural arenas.
5 A is a key determinant of B
In an individual’s career, tenacity is a key determinant of success.
6 It is manifest that …或者It is universally acknowledge that…
It is manifest that globalization can also engender a host of banes to the lives of people in the third-world countries.

解决类
1 give priority to something
The government should give priority to the optimization of its financial resources.
2 dedicated A to B
The government should dedicate more money to the alleviation of chronic poverty.
3 be likely to fall prey to / be vulnerable to
Without proper parental guidance, children are very vulnerable to the violent or pornographic content on TV shows.
4 something should be condemned rather than condoned(押尾韵)
Indiscriminate copying of traditional architectural style today should be condemned rather than condoned.
5 it is imperative/ crucial/ key/ essential that… 或者 something is of paramount/ overriding importance.
To the newly-arrived immigrants, it is imperative that they adapt to the local culture immediately.
6 abide by/ comply with
It is essential that government pass more stringent laws to compel drivers to abide by/ comply with the law.
7 something requires/ necessitates /call for…
The grave ecological problem requires/ necessitates/ call for joint effort of all the nations on the globe.
8 distinguish between A and B
Many youngsters lack the capacity to distinguish between right and wrong.
9 must ensure that
Parents must ensure that they dedicate enough time and energy to their offspring.

结尾段常用模板
1） based on the above discussion, I am convinced that…（用于一边倒文章的结尾段）基 于以上的讨论，我确信…
2） In the final analysis, I concede that… However, ….On balance…(用于折衷式文章结尾段) 作为最后总结，我承认…但是…综合起来看…
3） The upside of something, outweighs its downside 或者the strengths of something, prevail over its weaknesses 或者the pros of something outbalance its cons.某事利大于弊（如果 弊大于利把顺序颠倒一下就可以了）

人类the human race, humanity, man, humankind, Homo sapiens
在当代in contemporary society, in present-day society, in this day and age
解决(及物动词)tackle, address, resolve, combat
破坏(及物动词)undermine, jeopardize, devastate(最后一个与其最强)
影响(名词)impact, repercussions, ramifications, implications
危险(名词)perils, hazards, dangers
明显的(形容词)manifest, apparent, evident, obvious
从事(及物动词)carry out, conduct, perform, go about
积极的，好的 beneficial, advantageous
消极的，坏的 baneful, detrimental
好处－坏处benefits, blessings, boons—banes, pros—cons, advantages—disadvantages,
merit—demerit
无处不在的 prevalent, pervasive
大量的 a host of, a multitude of, a vast number of (后面跟可数名词复数) a great deal of, a
vast amount of(后面跟不可数名词单数)
增进enhance 代替improve 贫穷的impoverished 代替poor
保护preserve 代替protect 富裕的affluent/wealthy 代替rich
污染contamination 代替pollution 需要（及物动词）require, necessitate, call for