高考英语优秀作文赏析：2008年全国卷Ⅱ
满分作文1：
Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!
Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.
500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, it provides singleperson room, of which the price is RMB100 yuan per day and the number is 20, and 15 doubleperson rooms, with a price of RMB 150 yuan per day. It also provides hot water bath service. You can enjoy both Chinese and western food in the restaurant and drink coffee and tea in the cafe. The swimming pool is open for free the whole day. All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. So come to enjoy yourself!
Welcome to book rooms in Baishan Mountain.
名师点评：
本文开门见山，首先点明了主旨。本文最大的特点是应用了很多比较复杂的句式，使文章比较出彩。开头使用了独立结构交代宾馆位置。which引导的非限制性定语从句的使用也很正确。总地来说，文章句式精炼，是篇不错的满分作文。
积累卡片：
好词：1. provide v.提供2. convenience n.便利
好句：All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable.所有这些服务都会给你带来便利，并且非常的愉快。
好处：bring great convenience 带来便利
满分作文2：
Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!
Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.
The hotel is located 500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, a very convenient position to go sightseeing in the Baishan Mountain. There are two kinds of rooms for service: singleperson room, 20 in total and RMB 100 yuan per day and doubleperson room, 15 in total and RMB 150 yuan per day. The hot water bath is provided as well. We serve both Chinses and western food in the restaurant as well as coffee and tea in the cafe. All are provided in a short time. The swimming pool, which is open for the whole day, is free for you to come.
We accept booking rooms ahead of time. So come and enjoy!
名师点评：
本文叙述比较详细，使用了比较复杂的句式和短语。首句的伴随状语用得很好。在介绍房间类型时，作者使用了简短的对比句式，很精炼。作者还使用了定语从句which，同时在描述酒店的两种价格的时候也很恰当，语句生动而不重复。
积累卡片：
好词:1. sightseeing n.观光旅游2. book v.登记；预订
好句:1. The hotel is located 500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, a very convenient position to go sightseeing in the Baishan Mountain. 宾馆在距离白山入口处500米的地方，这对于参观白山来说是一个很方便的位置。
好处：伴随状语的使用很到位。
2. The swimming pool, which is open for the whole day, is free for you to come. 游泳池全天免费开放。
好处：which引导了非限制性定语从句。
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